Tuesday, December 13, 2011

Reflective cover letter

Ryan Donovan
            Dear Doctor Tinberg,
                                                The papers that I am including in my portfolio are analyzing a trend, Proposal, Application essay and annotating a scholarly article. The reasons I decided to include these four papers in my portfolio is because I know I did a good job on them and I like the voice in these papers.
            Analyzing a trend required for a trend to be identified in a thesis, document through the use of expert opinions that the trend exists. Analyze and discuss the causes and effects of the trend. And citing the sources of at least two scholarly articles in MLA style.
            The requirements of this paper was to find an collage application essay question of your choosing and respond to it.
            For this assignment I was to produce a proposal addressing a serious but solvable problem in my community. It required a intended reader, statement of an important problem, context, a possible solution, an analysis of cost and benefits a call to action. And had to be on the local level.
            For annotating a scholarly article, I had to locate a article, summarize the article in paragraph one. And in paragraph two, evaluate it’s credibility.
            At the beginning of this course after re reading some of my papers I’ve noticed that my writing lacked voice. One example of this was my application essay. It was well structured but was lacking voice. In the final draft I fixed that robotic part of the essay. 

Tuesday, December 6, 2011

Analyzing a trend very rough draft

Ryan Donovan
Analyzing a trend
            As we all know Obesity is a problem in all advance countries of the world more so in the U.S and UK. This is due to lack of or amount of physical actives, a high sugar, fat diet, hormonal issues.
            Since the 1960’s, obesity rates have been rising slowly at first then a huge increase in the span of four years. In my father’s day, he says seeing someone obese was quiet rare but now a days, it’s a daily thing.
            The consequences of  obesity is tiring faster,higher chance of diabetes, higher chance of heart disease, high blood pressure, bone issues, high risk for surgeries.  


1. I dislike it. I couldn't find any good sources till class was starting soon
2. Citing sources and adding alot more

3. Nope its bad.